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POLICE OFFICIALS ARE CURRENTLY INVESTIGATING THE CIRCUMSTANCES THAT CAUSED THE DEATHS OF TWO MEN AFTER AN AMTRACK TRAIN STUCK THEM LAST WEDNESDAY IN RICHMOND.
AMTRACK SPOKESWOMAN VERAE GRAHAM CONFIRMED THE VICTIMS WERE HIT NEAR THE INTERSECTION OF CARLSON BOULEVARD AND OHIO AROUND ONE-FORTY IN THE AFTERNOON. THE AMTRACK DID NOT REOPEN UNTIL FIVE-THIRTY LATER THAT AFTERNOON.
BOTH MEN HAVE YET TO BE IDENTIFIED UNTIL FURTHER INVESTIGATION TAKES PLACE.
Same problem as the story above: You haven't used broadcast style and format.
ReplyDeletePlease revise it, and then I'll grade it.